Rough Cut 1

Our Feedback from our first cut:

You need an institutional logo at the start * Framing is not great – tops of heads cut off – it makes it difficult to follow the narrative * You only use close ups and ECU’s – we need to see more of a variety of shot distances * It needs a soundtrack *Too much of the smoking shots – although the ash dropping shot is good *Not much happens in the narrative – man has a photo and drives away. He is sad – where will the film go from here?

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Uploaded by Jade Jacqueline Flack - 8309

Created by  Jade Jacqueline Flack - 8309 and Joseph Anderson-Luck - 8905